Many people today put personal and private information online (address, phone number, and credit card number) to facilitate everyday activities, such as banking, shopping, and socialising.

　　Is this a positive or negative development?

　　单主体议论文，问利弊。

　　【立场】positive

　　【段落示范】【立论-好处】

　　1. As a matter of fact, storing personal information online is an inevitable trend, which indicates that behind such practice are more gains.

　　总起句。

　　2. The most conspicuous one is that this development brings much convenience and improves efficiency.

　　详写好处：便利，且提高效率。

　　3. In the past, there were either cases where consumers spent the whole day walking around in shopping malls to look for something eye-catching and compare prices or cases where clients spent a half of a day queuing in a bank to handle business activities.

　　[今昔对比论证]过去，信息不存于网络，都是线下活动，浪费时间

　　4. However, with the increasing busy lifestyle that the majority of people are forced to live nowadays, they do not have much time, and those everyday activities can actually be done by a single click on certain websites once netizens have put their information online.

　　信息存于网络，便利人们将日常活动都在网上解决。

　　5. In this case, such a tendency suits today’s fast-paced life.

　　适应当代生活。

　　【解析】

　　1. 内容(Task Response)*** 特别重要 ***

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　　2. 组织(Coherence and Cohesion)*** 尤其重要 ***

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　　3. 词汇(Lexical Resource)

　　inevitable 为形容词，意思是“无可避免的”。归类于“通用词”。

　　conspicuous为形容词，意思是“明显的”。归类于“通用词”。

　　queue 为不及物动词，意思是“排队(等候)”。归类于“通用词”。

　　4. 语法(Grammatical Range and Accuracy)

　　第3句：主句为there were either cases or cases; either…or…的平行结构中，cases之后分别跟where引导的定语从句。

　　第4句：主句为and连接的两个独立句(they do not have much time & those everyday activities…), 句子开始with复合结构后跟that引导的定语从句，that指代lifestyle; and后的独立句跟once引导的时间状语从句。