题目：Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and other measures are required.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.A problem of modern societies is the declining level of health in the general population, with conflicting views on how to tackle this worrying trend.
通过代词this的使用使得“现象”与大众对现象的看法产生了衔接，清晰简洁，不留痕迹做到了评分准则中的“uses cohesion in such a way that it attracts no attention”
Onepossible solution is to provide more sports facilities to encourage a more lifestyle.
通过 “one possible”写出了后文还会提到提到其他的解决方案，从而体现了后文在分段和内容上与总观点的对应，即评分准则中的”skilfully manages paragraphing“
Advocates ofthis believe that today’s sedentary lifestyle and stressful working
conditions mean that physical activity is no longer part of either our work or our leisure time. If there were easy-to-reach local sports centres, we would be more
likely to make exercise a regular part of our lives, rather than just collapsing in front of a screen every evening. The variety of sports that could be offered would
作用同上“通过对于关键词的修饰进一步论证了论点中涉及的关键重心内容，体现了内容的深化，论据与观点的衔接”(即增多“sports facilities”的第二个原因：需要满足更多人的需求)，两个原因之间并没有生硬的使用“Firstly, Secondly”
cater for all ages, levels of fitness and interests: those with painful memories of PE at school might be happier in the swimming pool than on the football pitch.However, there may be better ways of tackling this problem. Interest in sport is
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not universal, and additional facilities might simply attract the already fit, not those who most need them. Physical activity could be encouraged relatively cheaply, for example by installing exercise equipment in parks, as my local council has done. This has the added benefit that parents and children often use them
together just for fun, which develops a positive attitude to exercise at an early age.
As well as physical activity, high tax penalties could be imposed on high-fat food
products, tobacco and alcohol, as excessive consumption of any of these
contributes to poor health. Even improving public transport would help: it takes longer to walk to the bus stop than to the car.In my opinion, focusing on sports facilities is too narrow an approach and would not have the desired results. People should be encouraged not only to be more physically active but also to adopt a healthier lifestyle in general.