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发布时间:2021-04-02 关键词:雅思写作知识点
摘要: Many cities have vehicle-free days, when people are required or encouraged to take a bus, bicycle or travel by taxi. Do the advantages of this outweigh disadvantages?
Many cities have vehicle-free days, when people are required or encouraged to take a bus, bicycle or travel by taxi. Do the advantages of this outweigh disadvantages?
应对上面这个题目,学生在正文写了如下一句话:
With the air pollutions and noise pollution affect the environment more and more serious in recent years, thereby the environment protection should be considered as everyone’s business.
不难发现:
语法错误,整个句子缺失主句。
试图创建的因果关系比较简单且显得生硬。
教师修改后如下:
Serious as air pollution is now, to reduce vehicle use and thereby to minimize exhaust emissions have been a pressing need.
解析:
保留了原有的因果关系,但调整了“果”这一部分,这样表述的话信息量会更足,对“空气污染”的根源分析也更透。
倒装的原因状语结构,写法同as所引导的让步状语结构倒装,形式都是:形容词+as+主语+be动词。
thereby这个词也要特别注意,千万不要误记成连词,它的使用方法一般是:用在句首另起一句;或者如此句,搭配连词and使用。
小总结:
因果关系是写作很重要很常用的一环分析,那么我们在思考时,不要浅浅地浮在表面分析,往下挖一点你的分析就更有深度。